Sunday, October 23, 2005

One more thing on my mind, I'd like to ask . . . does this work as a poem, do you think? (The ellipses-looking parts are supposed to be white space, just forgot how to do so in html). I keep going back and forth, I can't decide.

The Lost Eye

lapses . . . I can’t see

lapidarily titillates . . . I can’t see

lists, the breeze . . . believes

it has . . . alone, without me,

it, can see . . . alone, without me

lapidarily titillates doesn't exactly roll off my tongue, but I think this is wonderful, evocative, haunting.
Josh--thank you.
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